Sunday, December 13, 2015

wrong turn




 Wrong Turn Part – 1

          Sayantram..office lo work muginchukoni nenu intiki vachi chuste illantha hadavidiga undi enta idi intha mandi janam unnaru ani anukuntundaga appudu gurthuku vachindi ma nanna naku pellli sambadalu chustunnaru andulo oka ammai  father inka babai lu nannu chudataniki vastunnarani.

             Intloki adugupettagane ma father nannu chusi vacha ra eroju kuda intha late enti sare kani ila ra ani pilichi...ammai valla father ki nannu parichayam chesaru...na peru Lavan Kumar, age 28, tellaga untanu, nenu chese work ilaga mottam telusukoni maku kurradu ok bava garu muhurtalu chusukoni ammai ni chudataniki ma intiki randi ani cheppi vellipoyaru..ma nanna santhosham bavagaru ani cheppi vallatho patu inti bayatadaka velli saganampi vacharu. Lopalaki vachi ma father maa ammatho ila annadu osey arundathi mottaniki mana intlo chala yella tarvata mana intlo pelli bajalu mogabotunnaye ante avnandi chustundane na bujji pellidu ki vachadu ante inka aschayaram gane undi. Ala vallu na pelli tantu gurinchi matladukuntu vunte naku matram vollantha chematalu pattesay..okkasariga bhoomi antha kampinchinattu anipinchindi ..kallu chetlu adaka emcheyalo tochaka na room lo ki vellipoye gadiya pettukoni mancham meda kulabadipoyanu.

     Identra ...ee mogavadina pelli anaganee egiri gantu vestadu kani nenu ila tension padipotunnanu ani anukuntunnnara..daniki oka reason undi adi entate nenu dress vipesi nunchunto ammai ani porabadataru meru ala untanu nenu......

     Ma amma nannalu ku okka ga nokka abbai ni avatam valla garamba pencharu...ma amma ki adapilla puttalani korika undedi kani nenu puttam tho tanaku adapilla pudithe ela ready chestundo na chinnappudu alaga nannu kurchopetti ready chesedi. Ammai getup lo nannu chusina evarina sare nenu abbai ni ante nammevaru kadu endukante na rangu alantidi mari piga ma amma naku vaddanna nalugu petti na juttu ki sambrani vesedi nannu juttu  cut cheyinchataniki oppukunedi kadu ala na sariram chala sunnithanga marindi piga na juttu kuda twara perugu vundedi.

       Ika naku ooha telisinapptnunchi andari abbai llane nenu kuda jolly ga enjoy chesevadini ma amma ki istam lekapoina nenu raka raka la haristyles maintain chesevadini ala na inter varaku bagane jarigipoindi. Aa tarvata degree loki enter ayanu ikkade naku asalu bayam pattukovatam modalu aindi...degree loki vachaka na frnds tho tirigatam vallatho chating cheyatam thone saripoyedi ala oka roju vallaki na tenth, inter  photos chuipstundaga andulo ma amma naku 10th lo fancy dress competition ki vesina Gopikamma getup photo chusi na frnd okadu ila annadu entra Lavan nuvvu 10th lo ela unnavo ippudu anthe unnav okka height lo marpu tappa asalu chudataniki sannaga inka chepplante najjuga unnav ra nv kani lady getup veste na asalu ninnu evaru gurthupattaleru oka hot figure lane chustaru annadu...vagindi challe pora ani vallani pampi na room loki velli addam munchu nunchoni nannu nenu chusukunnanu vadu andi nijame ani pinchi na chinnaptnunchi nenu sannaga ne unnanu ani anukunnanu. Kani aa tarvata aa vishayame marchipoyanu.

            Ala konni rojula tarvata college lo undaga toilet vachi bathroom loki velte na frnd already toilet postu nunchunnadu nenu velli vadi pakka dantlo postu unte aprayatnanga vadi dani meda na kannu padindi. Anthe nenu okkasari ga shock ki guriyanu endukante vadidi almost nakanna double undi piga lavuga kuda undi. Identi vadidi antha undi nadenti inthe undi ani cheppi internet lo search cheste na age valladi antha almost na frnd di lane unnai naku bayam pattukundi nakendu peragaledu ani..aa roju ni8 intiki vachi bonchesi nidra potunte na frnd di inka nenu net chusina valla ve na dream loki vachay vatini ala gurtu techukuntundagane naku out aipondi first time. 

                           

Wrong Turn Part – 2

           Teliyakundane naku oka inferiortiy complex pattukundi appatnunchi nenu mogavadine istapadatanu kani enduko teliyadu na frnds di kani inka evaridina chuste nadi erect avvatam start ayyedi ala nenu daily vatini oohunchuntu na chest ni press chesukuntu Hand pump kotta dam alavatu chesukunnanu...

             Ala jarigipotu undaga oka roju poddune lechi snanam chesi college ki ready avdamani cheppi addam mundu towel meda nannu nenu chuskunte na chest ammai laku malle kasta perigi undtam gamaninchanu emundile kontha mandiki inthe untay ga ani cheppi college ki vellipoyanu...kani na alavatuni matram manukolekapoyanu...ala chustundagane na body nake teliyakunda chala marpulu vachay. Ala nannu nenu oka roju chusukoni shock ki guryanu entante na chest inka cheppalante na breast teenage adavalla ku malle nikkapoduchukoni perigi poyi unnay alane na nadumu sannaga unte na pirralu matram ettuga ayyay...ika appatnunchi naku bayam perigipoyi ee naluguri lo unna kuda full ga body mottam dress lo ne undevadini...na frnds tho bayataki velli tiragatam kuda tagginchesanu. T – shirts vesukoni tiragaleni paristitiki vachesanu.

         Oka roju na frnds antha kalisi oka room lo BF's chusta nannu kuda join avvamani balavantam cheste vellanu. Akkada vallantha dantlo vache ammai lanu chustu songa karchukuntu aa figures body shape ni boobs ni chudane valla penis sarruni piki levatam gamaninchanu kani aa figures ni chuste ematram mood raledu but andulo unde male pornstar di chudangane nadi light ga erect ayindi.

           Ala degree complete kuda ayindi job lo cherina kani na position lo em marpu raledu...ika labam ledu inthe unte kanuka inkemanna avvachu nenu matram mogavadi gane undali naku ilanti pichi korikalu povali anukoni doctor ni kalludam ani decide ayyanu...appudu doctor nannu check chesi em ledule babu kontha mandi mogavalla lo harmone imbalance valla rommu peragatam nadumu taggatam lantivi untai operation tho marchochu kakapothe oka chinna vishyam entante inni rojulu nv hand pump gents danni oohunchikoni cheyatam valla females meda intrest radu niku okkasariga kabatti nv immediate ga cheyalsina pani entante velli edanna prostitute tho kalisi enjoy chey ela anipinchindo naku vachi cheppu and daily nuvvu counceling ki ravali ani cheppadu. Sare doctor meru cheppinatte chestanu ani cheppi vachesanu.

             Idi ila undagane ma nanna naku marriage fix chese saru ...so idi na paristthi frnds. Ika late cheste anthe sangathulu ventane edo okati chesi mundu nadanni test cheyali ani cheppi na frnd okadiki phone chesi telisina prostitute number unte pampara ani adiganu..vadu oka agent number message chesadu.

               Aaa number ki call cheyagane....oka lady voice Hello nenu Kanakam ni matladutunna avathala evaru andi ventane nenu na peru cheppi oka manchi figure ni ni8 ki arrange cheyyamannanu daniki Kanakam figures mottam eroju book ayyaru nenu matram kali gane unnanu nv nenu cheppina chotu ki vachay ani address msg chesindi...

                     Evng Kanakam pampina address auto vadiki chupinchi ponivamannanu...Auto nenu cheralsina Gamyam vypu parugulu pettatam modalu pettindi kani appudu naku teliyaledu nenu tisukundi WRONG TURN ani...........

             


                    

Wrong Turn Part – 3

            Auto vadu cheppina address daggara dinchagane chuste adi city bayata oka old bunglaw la undi andulo chala gadulu vunnay. Nenu chinnaga lopalaki veltunte konni rooms lo ammai lu make up vesukuntunte inkonni room lo ammai abbai latho unnaru nenu silent ga tanu cheppina room number daggaraki vellagane bayata iddaru bodyguards addu paddaru..nenu ventane naku kanakam cheppina Code Word gurtukvachi vallaki cheppanu vallu pakkaki jarigi nannu lopalaki pamparu.

     Lopalaki enter avvagane mallepula parimalamtho room antha gumainchi kodutundi. Chudataniki chala visalanga undi dim lightling tho room antha neat ga decorate chesi undi naku tension ekkuvai melliga madyalo unna mancham vypu adugulu vesanu inthalo bedroom nunchi Kanakam bayataki vachi natho Oh nuvvena aa phone party baga letha ga unnave sare undu vastunna ani cheppi loniki velli ready ayyi vachindi.  Kanakam oka middle age aunty tanu saree kattina tiru jada lo puli petti allina teru chuste ee mogadikina kasitira katu veyalani untundi kani naku matram ee feeling raledu.

        Na pakkana kurchoni ika enduku alasyam modalu pettu ani cheppi mancham mida panukoni tana chira inka langa etti ra mida padu kanichey..alasyam cheyamaku naku chala panulu vunnai andi. Naku chematalu pattesinay emcheyalo telika alane nilabadi poyanu adi gamaninchi tanu enti first time aa ani adigi ninnu chustene artham avutundi le first time ani sare kani mood teppistanu undu ani lechi na shirt vippesi na banian tesi tanu bittara poindi natho identra adavalla la niku unnay andi nenu bayapadutunte sare le ela unte nakenduku ani cheppi na pant zip open chesi nadanni bayataki tisi chsui kangu tini natho entra raka raka naku mood vachi e ni8 veyinchukovali ani anukunte nilanti teda tagiladu ani kasirindi nenu ventane tanato naku pelli kudirindi nenu test chesukovataniki vachanu nadi lestunda leda ani cheppi pls naku cooperate cheyandi ani batimalanu.

               Daniki kanakam sare ani oppukoni nadanni tana chetiloki tisukoni adistu muddu pettindi aina kani nalo chalanam ledu ika labam ledanukoni tanu nadanni notlo pettukoni chikutu adistu entha prayatnam chesina naku levane ledu...ika na valla kadura nidanni lepatam vellipo ani cheppabotunte tanaki phone vachindi.

                 Avatalaki velli Phone etti matladunte naku koncham koncham vinipistundi tanu evarino batimi ladutundi vaddu pls eroju figures kali leru ramaku ani kani avatala vallu oppukunnatu leru ventane call cut aipoindi...Tanu tension ga na daggaraki vachi kurchoni ila anukundi aa sachinodiki ee roje mood ravala na figures emo kali leru vadu vaste na dumpa temputadu poni nenu veyinchukundama ante vadi dampudi ki  nenu tattukolenu ela ra anukuntundaga nenu emindi ani annanu...appudu tanu na vypu chusi edo alochinchukoni tanalo tane matladukoni navvi ventane natho ila andi nidanni leputanani mata ichanu kada danni ela lepalo artham aindi ani cheppi bayata unna body guards ni pilichi chevilo edo cheppindi vallu pada veldam ani natho annaru nenu ekkadi ante avanni anavsaram pada ani nannu balavanthanga lakku poyi oka gadilo padesaru. 

                  Na gunde dada peragatam modalu pettindi em jarutundo artham kaledu. Inthalo gadi talupu tesukoni iddaru hijralu na mundu ku vachhi nanu chusi abbo entha andam ga unnado ee kaboye pitta aina cha andaru velli ee kanakanike dorukutaru padu manaki tagalaru business start cheddam ante  ani anukuntu vachi dave chelli mustabu ayydu gani ni mogudu vastunnadu ani annaru.  

                   Ey em matladu tunnaru miru nenu mogadnni nannu pattukoni pitta , chelli ani antarente ani annanu. Vallu nannu chusi navvi memu modatlo nilane chelli ikkadi ki mogavallamane anukoni vachamu kani malo vishayam ledani telisi mammalni ela chesi debbalu veincharu appudu telisinde maku memu ento niku telustundie lo eroju ni8 ika alasyam cheyakunda ra ani lagaboyaru nenu vidilinchukoni parigetta boyanu kani nannu pattukoni na shirt ni chinchesindi andulo oka hijra.

Wrong Turn Part – 4

      Ika rendo di na pant inka drawer lagesi nannu nude ga chesi nilabetti ippudu parigettave annaru nenu siggutho chatuga nilabadi na battalu naku iccheyandi nenu vellipotanu ani annanu . Daniki vallu velduvu le chelli eroju ni8 ni shobanam ayyaka vellipoduvu idigo akkalaki kopam teppinchakunda bayataki vaste paddatiga ready chestamu ledante niku debbalu padatay ani annaru.

      Naku hijras ante oka idea undi vallu emchestaro naku telusu vallatho godava pettukovatam manchidi kadu mundu vallu cheppinattu vindam tarvata tappinchukune sangathi chuddam ani cheppi nenu oka chetto na breasts ni inko chetto na penis ni cover chesukuntu chinnaga adugulu vesukunti valla daggaraki vellanu.

         Vallu natho ikkadi daka vachaka ee siggente ani cheppi na chetulu lagesi na body ni chusi shock ayyi jealosy ga feel ayyaru intha andamga undi inka ente ni edupu ani cheppi oka hijra na nipples ni suck chestunte inkoti na chinna penis ni dani notlo pettukoni chikutundi inthalo body guards vachi vallani aravagane ..ha sare sare ika pani modalu pedatam ani cheppi nannu bathroom loki tisukuvelli hair removal cream tho na body antha hair tesisi daggarundi naku snanam cheppinchi oka mukmul towel tisukoni na body ni tudustunte aa towel touch kottaga anipinchindi.

             Ika nannu bayataki tisukuvachi oka hijra na chetulaki nail polish apply chestunte inkokati na hair ni arapedutu abba ente ni juttu intha andamga undi piga savaram kuda avasaram lentha ga ni  neck kinda daka undi ani cheppi tala arabetti juttu mudi vesindi.

               Nannu vadileyandi pls miku dannam pedatanu ani batimalutunna vinakunda bra and panty ni techi vesaru lo langa vesi transperent white blouse inka transperent blue color saree na boddu kindaki kattaru naku edupu tannukuntu vastundi na paristhithi chusi ika aa tarvata na face make up start chesaru first face mottam cloth tho tudichi neat ga powder rasaru aa tarvata eye brows shape tisi eye dazzler petti katuka addi bottu petti pedalaki leta erupu rangu lipstick vesi ika na jada mudi vippi chakkaga duvvi nadumu varaku savaram petti jadalo malle poolu turimaru.

               Ika chusukove ni andanni ani cheppi lepi addam mundu nilabettaru nannu nenu ala chusukoni shock ayyanu kani enduko telikundane na penis lechi nilabadindi cheera lo piki ettuga kanipinchesariki vallu navvukoni vediki ila undatam antene istam akka mana daggara bukaistunnadu ani client daggara adi leste ibbandi danni neat ga kattey mani andi sare chelli ani cheppi na cheera etti na panty lagi katteyabotunte vaddandi ani batimalu tu edva boyanu ventane rendo hijra na jada pattuku lagi osey edchavante ni anthu chusta makeup antha cherigi potundi gammuna kurcho cheppinattu chesi vellipove ani bedirincharu vastunna edupu ni digamingukunnanu. Nadanni kattesi na cheera sardi pakkana kurchopetti manhchanni poolatho alankarinchi mustabu chesaru..

                     Inthalo bayata nunchi naku arupulu vinipinchay evaro Osey kanakam kotta pitta vachindannav ede ekkade ani arustunte kanakam gontu vinapadindi vachesava Kumar bava nikosame chustunna fresh candidate ready ga undi aa gadilo vellu bava nikosam waiting ani ante sarene ani cheppi gadi loki enter ayyadu 6 adugula ettu undi dittanga simham la unte na paristithi jinka pilla la ayindi..Kanisam vedikanna cheppukunte nenu abbai ni vadilestademo chudali ani kangaru kangaru ga duram jariganu inthalo akkada unna hijralu ika ma pani aipondi veltam ee chelli jagartha all the best ani cheppi veltu talupu daggara nunchunna aa Kumar gadi bugga gilli letha pilla bava puvvula chesuko ante Osey meru ponde naku telusu ela chusukovalo ani kasurukuntuu..Na vypu tirigi naduchukuntu mancham medaku vachi kurchoni ala moola dakkunte em vastunde ra na mundiki ani arichadu. Naku bayam vesi ventane tana daggaraki vellanu. 


Wrong Turn Part – 5

        Nenu velli kumar pakkana kurchogane okate mandu kottina vasana vastundi asalu matalu kuda sarigga ravatam ledu vadi notlonunchi aa matthu ki.  Nenu vaditho matlade lopu na cheera paita lagesi na male breasts ni vottutu intha chinna ga unnay ente evadi cheyyi padaledu ni meda intha varaku ponile na boni manchide ika chikatam modalu pettave ani zip tiyyaboyadu.

        Inthalo nenu kumar tho ayyo nenu cheppedi okka kshanam vinandi nenu mirankuntunnatu ammai ni kanu abbai ni nannu ela balavatham ga chesi mi daggaraki pamparu meranna na meda jali chupinchi vadileyandi ani vedukunna kani tagina mattulo unna vadi cheviki nenu cheppindi emi ekkaledu baga mood tho vaste ente ededo vagu tav aina ippudu enti nuv mogadi vi antava  aithe sare asalu mogadu ante ela untado mogadi dhi entha vuntundo niku chupistane ani cheppi nannu nilabetti na chira konganu balavatham ga lagesadu.

            Okkasariga ala chese sariki na cheera vadi chetilo undipoyindi gira gira tirigesariki naku kallu tirignattu anipinchi kasta lo terukoni langa jacket lo unna na vypuku na cheera nunchi vastuna scent vasana pilustu mundu ku vadu vastunte nenu bedirpoyi venaki venakki jarugutu godaki anukunnanu ala Kumar na mundu vachi nilabadi nenu atu itu tappinchukovataniki vilu lekunda chetilu addam petti vadi oka chetto  na rendu chetulu piki lepi godaki adimi petti inko chetto na  nadumu pisikestu na breasts ni nalipestu chiraviki vadi pedalatho na pedalanu andukunnadu vadi notlo nunchi vastunna vasanaki tattukoleka vantu vachinattu modata anipinchina kasepatiki vadu na pedalanu korukutunte chinna ga lona kattesi unna na bujji modda levatam modalu petti naku ibbandi kaligistunte atu itu oogutunnanu adust cheyataniki kani vilupadaledu.

                   Kasepatiki vadu na position chusi arthamayyi nilanti vallani entha mandi ni chudalede chusava okka muddu pettagane ni daniki entha mood vachindo ani cheppi ni danni ibbandi pettanu le ani cheppi chappuna na langa inka panty lagi na modda ni free chesadu adi ventane 3 adugula tachu pamu la lechi nilabadindi.

                     Danni chusi vadu navvi ippudu asalu mogavadi dhi entha untundo chupistane neku ani cheppi na chetulu alane pattukoni vadi rendo chetto pant tisesadu anthe danni chudagane na mati poyi na modda inkasta perigindi...endukante nivurugappina nippula levakundane kumar madda 5 angulala poduvu inka 3 angulala vedalpu tho undi. Vadu na face lo expression chusi ascharya poindi challe danni nuvve nidra lepali ani cheppi vadi chetto na chetini tisuko vachi balavantana pattinchadu. Danni touch cheyagane sarruna levatam modalu pettindi modata na chetini tiseyalani chusina poorthiga lechina vadi dani size chusi stroke cheyalani anipinchindi. Ala chinnaga kumar kalla llo kallupetti na chetto vadi danni stroke cheyatam modalu pettanu dadapu 9 angula la rod la tayaru aindi danni chudagane naku sagam oopiri agipoyindi.

                      Kumar malli lip kiss modalu pedithe oka chetto nenu stroke chestune vunna unde koddi vedi ekkatam modalu pettindi vadi modda naku arthamipoindi mood vachesindi vediki ika pani aiponde ani anukunna. Ala godaki anukoni unna nannu akkade mokkalla pi kurchopetti ika chetto adinchindi chalu ika notiki pani cheppave ani tosadu kani danni tisukovatam na valla kaledu kanisam dani tip ni kuda chikaleka poyanu. Osey lanja ila cheste unna mood potunde sarigga chiku ante nenu prayatininchana na valla kaledu ika vadu labam ledu ani nannu lepi mancham daggaraku tisukuvelli vadu mancham meda kurchoni ippudu try chey annadu nenu edo trans lo unnattu vadi danni notlo pettukovataniki try chesanu aina kani valla kaledu inthalo evarivo rendu chetulu na tala meda pettinattu anipinchindi tirige lopu balanga pattukoni tosaru anthe aa debbaki kumar modda sagam na notloki vellipoindi



Wrong Turn Part – 6

     Naku ventane kora poindi aina kani na tala ni vidavakunda strokes ippustune unnay aa chetulu ala kasepatiki naku chikatam lo flow vachindi tarvata na talanu vadileste nenu evara ani chuste KANAKAM na venaka nilabi navvutu osey Lavanya ani nannu lady ga sambodistu  nenu rakamunde action loki digipoyave undu help chestanu ani cheppi alane undi kasta pakkaki jarigi nenu em chestunnano chudu nv alane cheyyali andi.

       Nenu mokalla pine kurchoni pakkaki jarigithe kanakam mokalla meda kurchoni Kumar bava idi kotta pitta kada inka nerchukoledu emi anukoku nenu chupistale ela cheyalo ani cheppi modda ni chikatam modalu pettindi madayalo api artha mainda ela cheyalo ante nenu tala oopanu sare ra cheddam iddaram ani cheppi kanakam tip chikutu nannu vadi balls chikamandi  aa kasepatiki adi balls chikutu nannu tip chikamandi.

       Memiddaram okesari blowjob ichesariki vadiki mood vachi mottam ma moham pi karchesadu. Ventane kanakam na daggara ki vachi na face antha clean ga lick chesi mottam vadi veeryanni notlo ki tesukoni naku lip kiss ichi na notlo sagam posi minginchesindi.

         Tarvata lechi face tuduchukoni ika ni pani modalu pettu bava nenu veltanu ante ekkadiki potave ani lagi kanakam sallu pattukoni vattithe abba vadulu bava chala panulu unnay nikosam ilanti figure techanu danto enjoy chey mundu ante danni vadilesi na vypuku tirigadu.

             Nannu piki levamani cheppi inka aa jacket enduko vippey anagane mottam tesisi nude ga nunchunnanu vadu mancham pi padukoni vachi na pi paduko ve annadu nenu alane chesanu. Vadu na jadani munduku tesukoni na koppulo unna malle la vasana chustu na neck pi muddulu pedutu chinnaga malli vadi danni mood loki techi na pirra la ki rastunnadu. Next em jarabotundo arhtamai vadini batimalanu kavalante inko blowjob istanu nanu vadiley ante ivvataniki inka time undileve idduvu gani mundu asalu pani modalu pedatam ani cheppi vadi rendu chetulatho na pirralu pisukutu chinnaga chilchi alane rough ga condom kuda pettakunda okkasariga lopaki tosesadu aa debbaki naku narakam kanapadi gattiga arustunte na jacket na notlo kukki migilina saganni kuda tosesadu nenu noppi barinchaleka gila gila kottukuntunna vadi pi kurchoni ventane vadu oka chetto na nadumu ni gattiga pattukoni kadalakunda inko chetto na breast ni pattukoni na nipples ni notlo pettukoni chikatam modalu pettadu ala cheyatam valla okesari sammaga inka noppiga rendu vidaluga anipinchindi naa ass hole nunchi bleeding kuda ayindi aa debbaki vadu navvi naku ribbon cutting ila cheyatam ante entho istam ani cheppi chinnaga vadi danni bayatki tiyagane pranam lechi vachi nattu ayindi malli ventane lonaki tosesadu ala kasepatiki nenu rhytham lo ki velli piki kindaku vadi pine kurchoni oogutunnanu.

            Ala kasepatiki pain poyi pleasure vachindi alane kumar debbaki lavan kumar poyi lavanya vachi cherindi na vontolo ki. Ala entha sepu vesukunnado kuda teliyaledu nenu alisipoyi alane vadi meda nidrapoyanu....

         Ala na life lo wrong turn open ayyindi..........................

4 comments:

  1. hi lav nenu krishnapriya-kp ni stry awesome undhi dani continuation kuda try chayee plss...

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  2. ok krishna priya i am in toor. i will post soon and thanks for comment

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  3. lavu ee stry continue cheyave babu plss maa bujji akka kadhu plss

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  4. డియర్ లావీ,
    కథను పూర్తిగా చదివాను, యీ మధ్య వచ్చిన స్టీరియో టైపు కాకుండా ఈ కథలో హీరోను మోదలే ఒక పూర్తి మగవాడు కాకుండా చూపించి కథకు చాలా న్యాయం చేశారు. అందుకనే బాగుంది. అలాకాక ఒక మామూలు మగవాడిని అలా బలవంతంగా ఆడదాని మాదరి చేంజ్ చేయాలని ప్రయత్నిస్తే దాంట్లో సహజత లోపిస్తుంది. అక్కడక్కడ కొన్ని typographic errors ఉన్నాయి. సాధ్యమైనంత వరకూ చిన్న చిన్న పారాగ్రాఫులు చేసుకుంటే బాగుంటుంది. అలాగే punctuation marks use చెయ్యడం వల్ల క్లారిటీ వస్తుంది. అంతే!

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